I have such a love/hate relationship with query letters.
I love them because writing one shows me where my story is lacking.
I hate them because writing one shows me where my story is lacking.
And that's where I am right now. I'd learn during my last ms to write out a draft query at the beginning of the writing process to ensure that my outline is on track.
The issue is that my story ended up taking some of its own twists and turns.
I think the most surprising thing for me now as I review choices and conflict and consequences is this: The character I'd assumed is my protagonist is NOT the protagonist.
Weird.
In fact, not only is she not the protagonist but she barely makes a decision for herself throughout the entire story.
And THAT is a surefire way to annoy every single reader and ensure no one gives a crap about her whatsoever.
Sigh.
The story is told in first person from two points of view. I'd figured she would be the "main" protagonist with the second person having his own decisions to make. Kind of two protagonists with their own stories that overlap, and each influencing the other's decisions.
But that's not really how it turned out. She influences him, and he definitely makes a decision. But any decisions she needed to make end up kind of being made for her. It's weird. And not what I meant to happen.
Not a deal-breaker. I can work with this. It was my first draft, after all. I didn't expect it to be perfect and submission ready right off the bat.
Saturday, January 2, 2016
Thursday, December 31, 2015
I'm back!
Wow ... it's been a long time since I've been here! Almost two years, is that right?
Well, the manuscript I was working on back then has become my "resting in a drawer" ms. I'd always heard that the first ms is often squirreled away, never to see the light of day, and it turns out to be true in my case.
In the end, the story didn't work. I tried to force characters into situations that didn't fit them, and the story ended up being dated and contrived.
Two agents read the whole thing: one read a very early (and I'm sure, truly awful) manuscript, and the second read the last version. She had some good things to say, but it was mostly bad news, and so I put it to bed.
One agent read a partial, and his main comment that stuck with me was that I tend to tell rather than show.
Ugh. I hate that.
But I do see it in all of my first drafts. I've discussed this with my writer friends. I tend to write down the scene as I picture it playing in my head, so a first draft of a scene is TEDIOUS with detail.
She stands up.
She walks over to wear he's sitting.
She puts one hand on her hip and says, ....
BOOOOORING!
All that crap usually gets slashed during editing/rewriting.
I learned SO MUCH with that first ms.
This second one should be much, much better.
The second one is a genre I'd never thought I'd write: young adult. In between the first and this second complete ms, I toyed around with another story that never went anywhere. I had intended it to be another women's fiction, but the characters' voices felt very young to me.
So ... I changed gears. The characters in my new story are in high school/early college.
And it's kind of romance-y. I'm not sure I can call it a full-on "YA romance" but it has a romantic bent.
I officially typed the first draft's last words late last night.
I actually sat there in front of my computer for a couple of minutes, staring at the screen and wondering if I actually just completed it.
I did. :)
And now, I have lots of work ahead of me: editing, rewriting and agent research.
Of course, I'll query the agents who requested my ms in the past, assuming they represent YA.
But other than that, I have to start my agent list from scratch.
As for editing: I really need to look at my female lead's story ... I fear she's missing some tension, or maybe the tension that is there is resolved somewhat undramatically.
So, anyway ... I'm excited to have another ms finished. I've ridden the "Wow, I have some talent/Ugh, I'm a complete hack" roller coaster throughout the draft, and I'm sure I'll continue the ride during the editing process.
We'll see what happens ...
Well, the manuscript I was working on back then has become my "resting in a drawer" ms. I'd always heard that the first ms is often squirreled away, never to see the light of day, and it turns out to be true in my case.
In the end, the story didn't work. I tried to force characters into situations that didn't fit them, and the story ended up being dated and contrived.
Two agents read the whole thing: one read a very early (and I'm sure, truly awful) manuscript, and the second read the last version. She had some good things to say, but it was mostly bad news, and so I put it to bed.
One agent read a partial, and his main comment that stuck with me was that I tend to tell rather than show.
Ugh. I hate that.
But I do see it in all of my first drafts. I've discussed this with my writer friends. I tend to write down the scene as I picture it playing in my head, so a first draft of a scene is TEDIOUS with detail.
She stands up.
She walks over to wear he's sitting.
She puts one hand on her hip and says, ....
BOOOOORING!
All that crap usually gets slashed during editing/rewriting.
I learned SO MUCH with that first ms.
This second one should be much, much better.
The second one is a genre I'd never thought I'd write: young adult. In between the first and this second complete ms, I toyed around with another story that never went anywhere. I had intended it to be another women's fiction, but the characters' voices felt very young to me.
So ... I changed gears. The characters in my new story are in high school/early college.
And it's kind of romance-y. I'm not sure I can call it a full-on "YA romance" but it has a romantic bent.
I officially typed the first draft's last words late last night.
I actually sat there in front of my computer for a couple of minutes, staring at the screen and wondering if I actually just completed it.
I did. :)
And now, I have lots of work ahead of me: editing, rewriting and agent research.
Of course, I'll query the agents who requested my ms in the past, assuming they represent YA.
But other than that, I have to start my agent list from scratch.
As for editing: I really need to look at my female lead's story ... I fear she's missing some tension, or maybe the tension that is there is resolved somewhat undramatically.
So, anyway ... I'm excited to have another ms finished. I've ridden the "Wow, I have some talent/Ugh, I'm a complete hack" roller coaster throughout the draft, and I'm sure I'll continue the ride during the editing process.
We'll see what happens ...
Sunday, January 12, 2014
Writers sometimes have big buts
Well, my day job completely sidelined the initial manuscript rewrite by going totally insane with busy-ness. On the nights I didn't have to work overtime (I'm a proofreader and editor by day), I couldn't bear the thought of sitting behind a computer screen. I've continued to take notes on ideas as they've come to me, and it's been an interesting process.
I've lived out the phrase "kill your darlings" on a few different versions of this manuscript. The most extensive was when my manuscript came in at about 120,000 words. I knew I had to hack and slice, so I considered completely cutting a character out.
BIG BUT: I loved her rekindling relationship with her ex-husband.
BIG BUT: I loved her ex-husband.
BIG BUT: I loved their "snappy" dialogue.
BIG BUT: I loved her overwrought mother-in-law.
I eventually came to realize that she really didn't belong ... I loved too many things that were outside of her character and was kind of forcing her to be a part of the overall story. So, I did it. I hacked her out and saved her in her own little folder to possibly rework into a story all her own.
So now, I'm trying to integrate my characters' stories. I have the main characters - Character A, Character B and Character C - each with her own set of friends and families. They share a common experience, but their stories are separate, which is what the agents who have read it or want to read it don't like.
My initial game plan was to turn Character A's current best friend into Character B. Because of the story line I already established with Character B, she would end up working at Character A's husband's company. I then thought of a way, based on a story line already established for the husband's company, that I could incorporate the husband of Character C, thereby bringing her into the fold.
I was extremely pleased with how quickly I was able to come up with this solution and was raring to get started.
And then.
BIG BUT: Character A's current best friend as written has some significant personality differences from Character B. That means I will have to change tons of dialogue between A and her friend, as well as much of the old friend dynamic to make this new friendship work.
BIG BUT: Character B's current work situation as written will have to be tweaked to replace the current big boss with Character A's husband.
BIG BUT: I can easily find a way to get Character C's husband in the act, and I can clearly see how Character C will meet A and B ... but, then what? There has to be something more significant to the story than they all meet and chit chat. I think I have this figured out, but it will involve quite a bit of rewrite.
BIG BUT: Character B has a significant epiphany facilitated by her currently written best friend. I love this best friend. She is wicked cool. I don't want to simply replace her with Character A.
OMGsh. Can you just hear the whining I've done in my head?
Do you just want to kick me in my big buts?
After the whining and gnashing of teeth subsided, I realized that if I want to seriously resubmit this manuscript, it needs to be what it needs to be, not what I'm emotionally attached to it being. Instead of mourning the story lines and dialogue and witty scenes that I have to change, I'm looking forward to discovering how these characters will get to know each other and make a difference in each others' lives.
My goal is to have the rewrite done and ready to submit by the first day of spring - Thursday, March 20.
I've lived out the phrase "kill your darlings" on a few different versions of this manuscript. The most extensive was when my manuscript came in at about 120,000 words. I knew I had to hack and slice, so I considered completely cutting a character out.
BIG BUT: I loved her rekindling relationship with her ex-husband.
BIG BUT: I loved her ex-husband.
BIG BUT: I loved their "snappy" dialogue.
BIG BUT: I loved her overwrought mother-in-law.
I eventually came to realize that she really didn't belong ... I loved too many things that were outside of her character and was kind of forcing her to be a part of the overall story. So, I did it. I hacked her out and saved her in her own little folder to possibly rework into a story all her own.
So now, I'm trying to integrate my characters' stories. I have the main characters - Character A, Character B and Character C - each with her own set of friends and families. They share a common experience, but their stories are separate, which is what the agents who have read it or want to read it don't like.
My initial game plan was to turn Character A's current best friend into Character B. Because of the story line I already established with Character B, she would end up working at Character A's husband's company. I then thought of a way, based on a story line already established for the husband's company, that I could incorporate the husband of Character C, thereby bringing her into the fold.
I was extremely pleased with how quickly I was able to come up with this solution and was raring to get started.
And then.
BIG BUT: Character A's current best friend as written has some significant personality differences from Character B. That means I will have to change tons of dialogue between A and her friend, as well as much of the old friend dynamic to make this new friendship work.
BIG BUT: Character B's current work situation as written will have to be tweaked to replace the current big boss with Character A's husband.
BIG BUT: I can easily find a way to get Character C's husband in the act, and I can clearly see how Character C will meet A and B ... but, then what? There has to be something more significant to the story than they all meet and chit chat. I think I have this figured out, but it will involve quite a bit of rewrite.
BIG BUT: Character B has a significant epiphany facilitated by her currently written best friend. I love this best friend. She is wicked cool. I don't want to simply replace her with Character A.
OMGsh. Can you just hear the whining I've done in my head?
Do you just want to kick me in my big buts?
After the whining and gnashing of teeth subsided, I realized that if I want to seriously resubmit this manuscript, it needs to be what it needs to be, not what I'm emotionally attached to it being. Instead of mourning the story lines and dialogue and witty scenes that I have to change, I'm looking forward to discovering how these characters will get to know each other and make a difference in each others' lives.
My goal is to have the rewrite done and ready to submit by the first day of spring - Thursday, March 20.
Sunday, August 25, 2013
Update: Back to the writing board
It's been a few weeks, but the same day I sent my query and posted my last blog entry, I heard back from the agent. She thanked me for my candor and agreed with the other agents' thoughts on the setup of my book and passed on it as it's written now. (She didn't read the full I submitted; she passed based on the info I told her in my email.) I was afraid that would happen, and I was super bummed when I got the message. At first. But then something occurred to me, and I got hopeful again.
Here's an email I sent to a coworker/friend who also dreams of publishing a novel (the subject line read IDIOT!):
And I think I’ve got it.
Yep, I'm back to the rewriting stage, but I'm excited about it. And I can't regret the path I took in submitting this project as is, because I may not have come up with the same rewrite notes six or seven months ago when I embarked on my fifth edit. Plus, if I had submitted without mentioning the feedback, chances are I would have received the same feedback again and a closed door. As it is, I have an invitation not just to re-query, but to resubmit.
I responded to the agent with the following:
Here's an email I sent to a coworker/friend who also dreams of publishing a novel (the subject line read IDIOT!):
That’s
me.
SHE
PASSED. Sob!
I
sat here, about ready to throw up, feeling so pissed at myself for being such a
complete idiot, all those HOURS AND HOURS editing when I should have
been rewriting, berating myself mercilessly that I’ve had three agents
interested and then reject it because of my setup.
I
was all, “That’s IT! I’m done. I’m a failure. F%&* it!”
And
then I recalled the part of her email that said if I wanted to rework it, to be
free to come back her way.
That,
my friend, is an R&R.
So,
putting the quote on my wall into action – “To get what you want, you have to
do what it takes” – I pulled myself up and IMMEDIATELY started drafting up
notes about how I can get [my characters] to connect.
And I think I’ve got it.
Here
we go again …
Yep, I'm back to the rewriting stage, but I'm excited about it. And I can't regret the path I took in submitting this project as is, because I may not have come up with the same rewrite notes six or seven months ago when I embarked on my fifth edit. Plus, if I had submitted without mentioning the feedback, chances are I would have received the same feedback again and a closed door. As it is, I have an invitation not just to re-query, but to resubmit.
I responded to the agent with the following:
Thanks for your message, ((agent name)). I was afraid that would happen, but I just couldn't, with good conscience, not mention the feedback I'd recently received.
I hope to query you with an updated version in the months ahead.
Warm regards,
To which she replied, "Take your time. Would love to see when done!"
I've been letting things simmer for a bit, jotting down notes and scenarios as they pop into my head, and I think I'm finally ready to jump in. I'm hoping the rewrite goes as smoothly as it's been going in my head (HA!).
Friday, August 9, 2013
It's out!
Whew! I finally got my full submitted. I wish I could relax, but right now I'm a nervous wreck. Because I was honest with this agent about some feedback I received, and I'm so worried that she'll change her mind.
But honesty's the best policy, right? RIGHT?
Ugh.
What I was afraid of was that I'd keep quiet about the agent feedback and send out the full and then receive the same feedback and the door would shut and that'd be that.
What I was hoping was that this agent would still read my ms, and if she ends up agreeing with the other agents, she might respond with an R&R rather than a flat-out rejection.
But what do I know!?
I'm sick to my stomach that I may have possibly given this agent an out before she's even read one word.
The nice thing is that she followed up with me regarding her initial request, and I told her I was editing based on a comment an agent just made (he had my first three chapters and synopsis). She was fine with waiting. I felt that the follow-up was a good sign. Have I just blown it now? WITH HONESTY?!
Or should I have just taken the agents' advice and simply revised the ms? Well, I might have, but I got the second feedback two days after I got the full request. I really wasn't sure how to handle it.
Obviously.
There's nothing I can do right now, so I should just sign off and get some sleep. If she passes, she passes, and I'll know there's a flaw in my ms that is going to continue to keep it from getting repped. If she still decides to give it a read, I'll do a happy dance and chill the heck out!
Oh, and those five emails that I'd been ignoring? They became 13 by the time I read them. One was the follow-up from the agent who now has my full, three were newsletters (two from agencies, one from WD), and the rest were rejections. But I must say, this was the NICEST group of rejections I think I've ever gotten. I'll share tidbits another time; right now I need to get away from the computer and breathe.
Wish me luck!!
But honesty's the best policy, right? RIGHT?
Ugh.
What I was afraid of was that I'd keep quiet about the agent feedback and send out the full and then receive the same feedback and the door would shut and that'd be that.
What I was hoping was that this agent would still read my ms, and if she ends up agreeing with the other agents, she might respond with an R&R rather than a flat-out rejection.
But what do I know!?
I'm sick to my stomach that I may have possibly given this agent an out before she's even read one word.
The nice thing is that she followed up with me regarding her initial request, and I told her I was editing based on a comment an agent just made (he had my first three chapters and synopsis). She was fine with waiting. I felt that the follow-up was a good sign. Have I just blown it now? WITH HONESTY?!
Or should I have just taken the agents' advice and simply revised the ms? Well, I might have, but I got the second feedback two days after I got the full request. I really wasn't sure how to handle it.
Obviously.
There's nothing I can do right now, so I should just sign off and get some sleep. If she passes, she passes, and I'll know there's a flaw in my ms that is going to continue to keep it from getting repped. If she still decides to give it a read, I'll do a happy dance and chill the heck out!
Oh, and those five emails that I'd been ignoring? They became 13 by the time I read them. One was the follow-up from the agent who now has my full, three were newsletters (two from agencies, one from WD), and the rest were rejections. But I must say, this was the NICEST group of rejections I think I've ever gotten. I'll share tidbits another time; right now I need to get away from the computer and breathe.
Wish me luck!!
Monday, July 29, 2013
Burnt. Out.
Have you ever decided you were going to do something, like, say, work out, and you jump into it full force and you work out every day and you're totally into it and you're enjoying it ... but then you start to get a little sore and it becomes less fun and starts being annoying and you don't look forward to your workout times anymore and then it's all a pain in your @$$?
Yeah. I think I did that with my querying.
Okay, no, it's not a pain in my at-sign-double-dollar-sign, but I think I've burnt myself out. Any free moment I had, if I wasn't actually sending out queries, I was researching agents - reading their agency websites, taking notes about their clients, making sure I understood their submission requirements. Not only did I query dozens of agents (I may even have sent queries to some of their office pets just to cover all my bases), but I also started following any agents on my query list who are on Twitter and a few who have Facebook pages, and then I also started following publishing magazines and websites, and before I knew it, I was drowning in the literary/publishing business.
And it started to become less fun.
Even going through my ms again is becoming drudgery. I still have that full request hanging out there, but I got some feedback from an agent who requested a partial, so I'm trying to spiff it up before I send it out, but editing TAKES FOREVER!
I'm not sure I conveyed that properly.
Okay. Better.
I'm not giving up. But I am taking it down a notch. Because girlfriend went a little nuts.
I knew there was a problem when my Yahoo email indicator indicated that I had a new email waiting for me, and I couldn't bring myself to look at it. (I have a Yahoo email account set up just for queries, so I know it's query related.) For five days now, the indicator has been telling me that I have five new emails, and ... I. Can't. Look.
Hopefully in the next couple days I'll get my full sent out, and then Ima chill for a bit. The agency wants a seven- to eight-week exclusive anyway, so that'll be a nice excuse to take a step back. Enjoy the last few weeks of summer. Hang out with my kids. READ A BOOK!
I have a couple other ideas that I'd like to start working on as well, though right now, the idea of outlining and writing a first draft is a bit overwhelming. Like, sickeningly overwhelming. It's a lot of work.
Why do I put myself through this? I could walk away from this whole thing right now. I don't HAVE to write anymore stories.
But I do.
Yeah. I think I did that with my querying.
Okay, no, it's not a pain in my at-sign-double-dollar-sign, but I think I've burnt myself out. Any free moment I had, if I wasn't actually sending out queries, I was researching agents - reading their agency websites, taking notes about their clients, making sure I understood their submission requirements. Not only did I query dozens of agents (I may even have sent queries to some of their office pets just to cover all my bases), but I also started following any agents on my query list who are on Twitter and a few who have Facebook pages, and then I also started following publishing magazines and websites, and before I knew it, I was drowning in the literary/publishing business.
And it started to become less fun.
Even going through my ms again is becoming drudgery. I still have that full request hanging out there, but I got some feedback from an agent who requested a partial, so I'm trying to spiff it up before I send it out, but editing TAKES FOREVER!
I'm not sure I conveyed that properly.
EDITING TAKES FOREVER!!!!!
Okay. Better.
I'm not giving up. But I am taking it down a notch. Because girlfriend went a little nuts.
I knew there was a problem when my Yahoo email indicator indicated that I had a new email waiting for me, and I couldn't bring myself to look at it. (I have a Yahoo email account set up just for queries, so I know it's query related.) For five days now, the indicator has been telling me that I have five new emails, and ... I. Can't. Look.
Hopefully in the next couple days I'll get my full sent out, and then Ima chill for a bit. The agency wants a seven- to eight-week exclusive anyway, so that'll be a nice excuse to take a step back. Enjoy the last few weeks of summer. Hang out with my kids. READ A BOOK!
I have a couple other ideas that I'd like to start working on as well, though right now, the idea of outlining and writing a first draft is a bit overwhelming. Like, sickeningly overwhelming. It's a lot of work.
Why do I put myself through this? I could walk away from this whole thing right now. I don't HAVE to write anymore stories.
But I do.
Thursday, July 18, 2013
Another request!
So. I was feeling discouraged, burnt out, a little query fatigued. I was still irked about the rejection I mentioned the other day, though I know I shouldn't take it so personally. Agents don't owe us any explanations, and I should just be happy to have an answer. (Still. Can't it be a nice-ish answer?) (Okay, let's not get me started.)
I sent out a few queries this afternoon. An agent tweeted about the summer being a slower time for her, so if anyone was thinking about querying her, they should do it. She happened to be on my list, so I sent my query out. A couple hours later, her name showed up in my inbox, and I thought, "Oh, great! The person who proclaimed that she has lots of time to read queries/pages has decided to not even read mine!" But nope ... it was her auto-response. Whew!
Then, an hour or so later, I got an email from an agent I had just queried a couple hours earlier. I've had experience with some super-quick rejections, so I opened the message with some trepidation.
"This sounds so wonderful ..." it began, and my rejection-addled brain finished the sentence for me "... but it's just not right for my list."
But wait. That's not what it said.
Not " ... but I'm not the right agent."
Not " ... but I'm going to pass."
It said, "... and we're very happy to consider."
Honestly, I was a bit too stunned to do anything for a bit. Then I realized.
I just got a request for my full manuscript.
Well ... that's good. (See? I told you I was stunned.)
After I finally got up to speed, I was excited and thrilled. And I AM excited and thrilled. Someone not only liked my idea, but also liked the way I presented it enough to want to invest some time and consider my full manuscript!
So. Happy.
But with an ever-present low hum of anxiety. Sigh.
Once I hit "Send" it's out of my control. I'm just going to be positive and enjoy this ride and give it my very best.
I sent out a few queries this afternoon. An agent tweeted about the summer being a slower time for her, so if anyone was thinking about querying her, they should do it. She happened to be on my list, so I sent my query out. A couple hours later, her name showed up in my inbox, and I thought, "Oh, great! The person who proclaimed that she has lots of time to read queries/pages has decided to not even read mine!" But nope ... it was her auto-response. Whew!
Then, an hour or so later, I got an email from an agent I had just queried a couple hours earlier. I've had experience with some super-quick rejections, so I opened the message with some trepidation.
"This sounds so wonderful ..." it began, and my rejection-addled brain finished the sentence for me "... but it's just not right for my list."
But wait. That's not what it said.
Not " ... but I'm not the right agent."
Not " ... but I'm going to pass."
It said, "... and we're very happy to consider."
Honestly, I was a bit too stunned to do anything for a bit. Then I realized.
I just got a request for my full manuscript.
Well ... that's good. (See? I told you I was stunned.)
After I finally got up to speed, I was excited and thrilled. And I AM excited and thrilled. Someone not only liked my idea, but also liked the way I presented it enough to want to invest some time and consider my full manuscript!
So. Happy.
But with an ever-present low hum of anxiety. Sigh.
Once I hit "Send" it's out of my control. I'm just going to be positive and enjoy this ride and give it my very best.
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